– Literacy Narrative
1. Add any general, constructive comments
about the essay as a whole and/or pieces of the essay that stood out to you
(good or bad).
2. How does the essay discuss a challenging moment in the author’s
literacy (learning to read/write/learn another language/another skill)? Is this
done in an interesting, narrative way (is there narrative tension, a crisis,
and a resolution)?
a. If not, how could the
author rewrite the order of the events (or cut some of them) to make the
narrative more compelling?
3. is there dialogue? If not, where might be a good
place to add some?
There isn’t any dialogue, it would be
4. Take one more look-–does
the author use any overused words
that could be replaced? What would you suggest instead? Is there anywhere where
it would be helpful to “show not tell” the reader what’s happening?
5. Repeat with second peer’s essay.
So, baiscally I want a reply in 300 words for each of the 2 essays.